[RELEASE} Digimon Story Cyber Sleuth Hacker's Memory Complete Definitive Edition

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Images 51-55 aren't here.
That's strange, is there a limit of 50 files per post?
Anyhow here they are, more coming soon.

51: "It's rather a long story" should be "It's a rather long story".
52: The second line here doesn't make whole lot of sense, something like "Our studio's Miss Kyoko will take it from here" feels a bit more fitting.
53: "I hope to see conclusion" should be "I hope to see the conclusion".
54: "Futures" and "Depends" shouldn't be paired like this, it should either be Futures and Depend OR Future and Depends (I vote for the latter).
55: "Chose" should be "Choose".
Post automatically merged:

1: I think this should say "Metropolitan Office Building" or "Metropolitan Building" rather than "Metropolitan Office".
2: I couldn't find any instances of "Spar off" being used, so I think it should be changed to just say "Spar".
3: "I have a case for me" should be "I have a case for you".
4: "Kamashiro" should be "Kamishiro".
5/7: "Hawkman" should be "Hawkmon".
6: "So please please teach me to fly", Either remove a please or put a comma after the first one.
8: "Do you just say" should be "Did you just say".
9: "To be lose control" should be "To lose control".
10: This option doesn't make any sense, since you already collected the ingredients in the previous Dr. Nanomon cases, and you don't collect any more in this one.
11: Removed after double-checking.
12: "Isn't is" should be "isn't it".
13: "Rhing" should be "Thing".
14: "You have help me out" should be "You have helped me out".
16: The response to option C doesn't make any sense at all.
18: "My goal is collect" should be "My goal is to collect". and "A obstacle" should be "An obstacle".
19: "Any use items" should be "Use any items".
20: Doesn't really NEED to be changed but a more accurate translation would be something like "It's good, isn't it, Jimmy KEN?" or "It's good, right Jimmy KEN?".
21: "A little surprise in store you" should be "A little surprise in store for you".
22: "So what did 2 two talk about" should be "So what did you two talk about" ("you 2" since you use numbers instead).
23: "I...have nothing left to pass onto you my...student" should be "I...have nothing left to pass onto you, my...student".
24: Looks like 2 lines should work.
25/27/28: All other instances of Digicode has used the English version, whereas these use the Japanese version.
26: "You're all" (You are all) Doesn't work as well here as "You all are" or "All of you are" does.
29: "It looks like it's like they're ready for us" should be "It looks like they're ready for us".
30: "What can even I say" should be "What can I even say".
31: "Keep an eye of this giant thing" should be "Keep an eye on this giant thing".
32: This is fine as is, but rather than saying "Arata and Yuuko and Yuugo", I think it should say "Arata, Yuuko and Yuugo.
33: "I don't want you disappear here now" should be "I don't want you to disappear here now".
34: "What the deal" should be "What's the deal".
35: Missing the D in "Yggdrasil".
36: Might also work with 2 lines.
37: "Eaters in a high-density Digital Waves" should be either "Eaters in high-density Digital Waves" or "Eaters in a high-density Digital Wave".
38: Missing the S in "Is".
39: "Awful lonely" should be "Awfully lonely".
40: "Are still be confused" should be "Are still confused".
41: Missing the R in "Yggdrasil".
42: Missing the L in "Yggdrasil".
43: "Treat you with my coffee" should be "Treat you to my coffee".
46: "Then I've leave you to it" should be "Then I'll leave you to it".
 

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1: "Damage to 1" should be "Damage to 1 foe".
2: If I remember right, in conversations with Fei in the story, her lines were written without her dialect, unlike this textbox in the colosseum.
3: "Let me but them" should be "Let me buy them".
4: Completely empty textbox during this lost property case (didn't check any other Shibuya digital shift cases).
5: "No two ways around it" should be "No two ways about it".
6: In this context, "Some time" should be "Sometime".
7: "I wonder what's inside but" should be "I wonder what's inside, but".
8-13: All other medals say "Digimon Medal" in the description.
14: This is the only medal (so far) that has a period after "Medal" in the description (so either make all of them have it or remove it from this one).
15: Since you're using the original Japanese names of the Digimon, both this "Fake Prof. Agumon" Medal and the "Prof. Agumon Medal" (which I failed to screenshot) should probably be changed to "Nise Agumon Hakase" and "Agumon Hakase" respectively.
This also includes their names in the medal collection log.
16: Name in the description is correct but medal name isn't.
17: An extra E in "Mugendramon" in the description.
18: According to Wikimon, This Digimon's name is spelled "Ancient Beatmon" and not "Ancient Beetmon".
19: "Thunderbimon" should be "Thunderbirmon" (again, according to wikimon).
20: "Pajramon" should be "Pajiramon".
21: Name in the description is correct but medal name isn't. Also it says "Med" instead of "Medal".
22: Medal Name is correct but description isn't.
23/24: Name in the description is correct but medal name isn't.
 

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Small batch to cap off Cyber Sleuth, Starting Hacker's Memory now.

1: "Show us your warrior's strength!" is the same as saying "Show us the strength of your warrior!". I'm not sure if just removing the apostrophe will do, so something like "Show us your strength as a warrior!" could be better (unless Craniummon is referring to your Digimon instead of the player, of course...).
2: "A child" should be "This child".
4: "Knowing or no knowing" should be "Knowing or not knowing".
5: Since "Proof of Sin" refers to an object, I'm fairly sure the punctuation is supposed to be after the end quotes, and not before.
6: Since Dianamon is a Digimon "Her" should be "Its".
7: "You're an wonderful Tamer!" should be "You're a wonderful Tamer!"
 

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1: "Ain't you just cool as the other side the pillow" should be "Ain't you just as cool as the other side of the pillow".
2: "All hackers are all" should be either "All hackers are" or "Hackers are all".
3: "Let me it make up" should be "Let me make it up".
4: "If you give you up" should be "If you give up".
5: Either change "Girl" to "Girls" or "Aren't" to "Isn't".
6: "For the real tough cases we go as a team." should be "For the real tough cases, we go as a team."
7: "How they could" should be "How could they". Also since "Login" is being used a verb here, it should be "Log in".
8: An extra I in "I".
9: Second line is out of alignment.
11: "That's why I'm know" should be "That's why I'm known".
12: Missing a U in "Yuu".
13/14: The text in 13 appears to be correct while 14 appears to be incorrect.
15: In this context, "Hacker" should be "Hackers" (He did not talk about a specific hacker in the first textbox).
16: "EDEN's pseudo-sensory feedback are really well done" should be "EDEN's pseudo-sensory feedback is really well done".
17: "Seems to have" should be "It seems to have".
18: "Fortunate-telling" should be "Fortune-telling".
19: "Processers" should be "Processors".
20: "I leave it to you" is fine, but I think that "I'll leave it to you" is better.
21: 2 Lines should do here.
22: "Touro" should be "Tooru".

On a side note, I'm gonna be a lot more thorough in HM than I was in CS, talking to more NPCs and the like. I wasn't very thorough in CS because I didn't start playing with the same intentions that I have now.

I will do a more in-depth new game+ playthrough of CS later, after I finish HM and the translation gets updated.
 

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1: "That's no bad is it?" should be "That's not bad, is it?".
2: Missing a space between "Hear" and "Me".
3: Since she's referring to a Digimon it should be "It" instead of "Her". However, this is her first time meeting a Digimon, so her using "Her" is pretty reasonable.
4: "Heard you singing" should be "Heard your singing".
5: "I'm know" should be "I know".
6: "Where no one can hear me" should be "Where no one could hear me".
7: "Sol" should be "So".
8: "But don't want" should be "But I don't want".
9: "Logout" should be "Log out".
10: "If explain it" should be "If I explain it".
12: "For those who aspire to be a hackers" should be "For those who aspire to be hackers".
15: In this context, "Any more" should be "Anymore".
16-18: "Login" and "Logout" should be "Log in" and "Log out".
20: "A opponent to battle" should be "An opponent to battle".
21: "People might realize I'm an old woman" should be "I wonder if grandma would notice" (referring to his wife as grandma, so using either "Grandma" or "My wife" will work).
25: "I was fine as I was but you did save me so take this" should be "I was fine as I was, but you did save me, so take this"
26: The sound he makes here is more of an annoyed "Huh!?", rather than a "Yeep!".
27: "Touru" should be "Tooru".
29: "Add here examples" should be "Here I add an example".
30: Deleted.
31: "Hey, Aren'y so tough now" should be "Hey, you aren't so tough now".
32: Missing an N in "AreN't".
33: "I took care of the guy that used Kayaba" should be "I took care of the guy that Kayaba used".
34: Might work in 2 lines...maybe.
35: "Login" should be "Log in".
36: "Maneating" should be "Man-eating", though it is very tight for space as is...
37: "Insights is" should be either "Insight is" or "Insights are".
38: This doesn't make a whole lot of sense. in the next textbox he says something like "Erika, it is you!" so this textbox should be changed to "You're Ryuuji's--! And--!?"....or something similar.
39: "Erica" should be "Erika".
40: I think it'd be better if he only said "Get out" once.
41: "I'll should use" should be "I should use".
42: "Our stomach" should be "Your stomach".
43: "That's game's been buggy lately" should be "That game's been buggy lately".
44: "There's something wrong about" should be "There's something wrong with".
45: Deleted.
46: Prior to this, the game was called "Metsuken 5", but here he says "Death Fist 5".
48: "Either way fine" should be "Either way is fine".
49: "It bet" should be "I bet".
 

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1: "Of topic" should be "Off topic".
2: "If do I get cursed" should be "If I do get cursed".
3: Remove the comma after "Riko's".
4: Should work in 2 lines.
5: "Into to the" should be "Into the".
6: "Riko's sister" should be "My sister".
7/8: Forgot to include these prompts with the other login/logout screenshots.
9: "Are you read" should be "Are you ready".
11: Missing an asterisk after the second meow.
12: "I believe in that" should be "I believe that".
13: "How skillfully they uses" should be "How skillfully they use".
14/15: These are two textboxes that happen one after the other. Pretty sure the first one (14) is the one that's wrong.
16: "You'd" should be "I'd".
17: "MOb" should be "Mob".
18: Rather than saying "Just here", she should be saying something like "Right here" or "Here's the next spot".
19: "Some day" should be "Someday".
21: "I've think" should be "I think" (by Nameless Mon at the bottom).
22: "I can easily than handle" should be "I can easily handle".
23: Missing a space between "3" and "Against".
24: "You're" should be "Your".
25: Remove the comma after "Chance".
26: "Word hard" should be "Work hard".
27: "Took" should be "Take".
28: Missing a quotation mark before "Police". Also "Sergeant" is supposed to be "Detective".
29: Same as above, replace "Sergeant" with "Detective".
30: "I'm judge" should be "I'm judging".
31: "Omnlet Rice Transdendental" should be "Omelette Rice Transcendental".
32: "Decided" should be "Decide".
33: "It" should be "He".
34: Deleted.
35: "That's a" should be "Those are" (a bit hard to see in the screenshot, but there are two of them). There were a few more lines in this cutscene that should be changed from singular to plural, but i failed to screenshot them apparantly...
36: "That's bit seedy" should be "That's a bit seedy".
37: "I would try come back to earth" should be "I would try to come back to earth", assuming it fits considering the space left...maybe consider removing the first sentence.

EDIT: forgot to write in 37, fixed.
 

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I explain this in the readme in more detail, but Date's rank is Sergeant so that's correct.
Also, I found the rest of the lines you were talking about in 35 and changed them to plural.
 
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Oh, sorry about that. I guess this is a good time to reread the readme.
Anyhow, here's the next batch. I'll split it into multiple parts on account of the image upload limit.

1: Missing punctuation in Yuuko's response.
2: I couldn't find much info about using "Took" like this online, but I think "Gave" would be better.
5: "I must how" should be "I must know how".
6: "Hacker" should be "Hacked".
7: "Feeling" should be "Feel".
8: "Guardromon" should be "Guardromon (Gold)", since that's the Digimon being referred to, as well as most other mentions of it's name being "Guardromon (Gold)". Also "zIt" should be "It".
9: Same as above.
10-12: Couple uses if "Him" that should be "It"
13: "So it's an Evolution form" would, in my opinion, look better as "So it's an evolved form".
14: "Capsian" should be "Caspian".
15: "If ever" should be "If you ever".
16: This is fine as is, but I have never seen/heard anyone say "You don't fool me", I've always seen/heard "You can't fool me".
17: I'm not super confident about commas, but I think this should be "Us, of course".
18: "Dinosaur Dogma" should be "Dinosaurists".
19-21: These three textboxes appear one after the other, and the middle one (20) doesn't make any sense.
22: Pretty sure this should be "I've got thick skin" rather than "I've got a thick skin".
23: "About all you" should be either "All about you" or "About all of you".
24/25: The text in 25 is an exact copy of 24.
26: "Logoff" should be "Log off".

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Part 2.

26-32: In 26-29, Erika calls the stuffed toy "Woopaluper", but in 30 Mina calls it "Woopauper". Erika also calls it "Wooper" in 31 and 32 but I'm assuming she's calling it that as short for Woopaluper.
33: "It's was" should be "It was".
34: "That wouldn't good" should be "That wouldn't be good".
35: "It was just about to get to work" should be "I was just about to get to work".
36: "But don't know" should be "But I don't know".
37: "I wonder if Ryuuji, Chitose, and Erika in the cafe right now" should be "I wonder if Ryuuji, Chitose, and Erika are in the cafe right now". Also, consider swapping "And" for "Or". Either one is fine though.
38: "Though" should be "Through".
39: I know what you said about the whole Manga/Comic thing in the readme, but Erika's VA literally says "Manga" here. feel free to ignore this though, just felt like mentioning it.
40: Missing the left Parenthesis as well as the second U in "Yuu".
41: Missing a question mark after "Book".
42-43: The second sentence of 42 should be removed, since that's exactly what he says in 43.
44: "Her" should be changed to "Their", since she's referring to the CS protagonist.
45: "I was corporate hacker" should be "I was a corporate hacker".
46: Second line is out of alignment.

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Last part of this batch.

48-56.

Try spreading the slashes and backslashes out a bit, and remove the > on the 3rd line and add a < at the end of the 2nd line.

See 57 to see what this looks like in JP and official EN.
 

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In the case of the text that says "Forgot what?" the official translators appear to have had a habit of making that mistake a lot.

It's supposed to be just "?" but they replaced that with "Forgot what?' so if you see the phrase "Forgot what?" it's a mistake.
 

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In the case of the text that says "Forgot what?" the official translators appear to have had a habit of making that mistake a lot.

It's supposed to be just "?" but they replaced that with "Forgot what?' so if you see the phrase "Forgot what?" it's a mistake.
Gotcha.
 

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It does look like some instances of comic should be manga instead, so I'll search through the text files for those when we're all done. Still, if you see any, feel free to tell me.
 
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1: Missing punctuation.
2: "The university" should probably be just "University" since he never mentioned a specific one. Also, "We'd make our make our dreams" should be "We'd make our dreams".
3-4: The hacking menu calls it "Root Access" while the Hacking Skill tab of the Player menu calls it "Route Access".
5&6: Deleted.
7: "Whose" should be "Who".
8: "Them" is probably fine, but I think "That" would be better.
9: "I never" should be "I'll never".
10: "You're" should be "Your".
11-14: A couple "Him" that should be "It".
15: "Have slightest idea" should be "Have the slightest idea".
16: "Laughing and you" should be "Laughing at you".
17: "Related the user's state of mind" should be "Related to the user's state of mind".
18: I don't know what this South park joke is doing here. if you wanna keep it in that's fine, but otherwise "Cereal" should be "Serious".
19: Ryuuji is asking about the player here, so it should be "He" instead of "They".
21: Two kinda minor things here, but usually anything the player says/thinks is enclosed in parentheses. Also It'd look a bit better if it said "I'll head to Coulomb" instead of "Head to Coulomb".
22-23: I'm assuming Noir is referencing Gankoomon's special move here, which is written differently on it's stats page. Also I've been curious about why only the first word is written in romaji, but not the other three words.
24: "The Digimon Kabuki" should probably be just "Digimon Kabuki".
25: "I just carried away" should probably be "I got carried away".
26: "Helping with our gym thrive" sounds weird. Either remove the "With" or replace it with "Make".
27: 3rd line is out of alignment.
28: Kinda unnecessary change, but I think it'd look a bit nicer if "Site." was moved up to the end of the second line.
29: Missing punctuation.
31: In addition to the obvious problem, there's a space missing between "Today!" and "I".
32: I have no idea if her username is supposed to be "1999 Anime Supremisist", or if "Supremacist" is just misspelled.
33: "And be broke" should be "And he broke".
34: "When once you improve" should be either "When you improve" or "Once you improve" (I vote for once).
36: The last "Come on" has an extra E in it.
37-38: Since you mentioned it, here are two more instances of Manga/Comic.
 

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So, as for Root/Route Access, it's weird.
The graphics and text in the official English releases say Route.
I used Route in my translation and assumed the unused English graphics this version of the game contains also said Route but they don't. They say Root Access. I didn't change the graphics to say Root. They were already like that.
I'm not sure if they're going for a pun or what.
What do you think? Which should I go with? Route Access or Root Access.

Also, yes of course I've changed that weird "super cereal" thing the official translators did.
As for Gankoomon's attack, I had trouble deciding what to do. But I'll just change it to what Wikimon says, which is Jishin! Kaminari! Kaji! Oyaji! which is also shorter and will allow me to put spaces between each word like they're supposed to have.
 
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I would go with Route Access, since that has more of a networking feel to it. whereas Root Access feels more like it has to do with file systems.
 

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Sure thing.

1: "Even you" should be "Even if you".
2: "Your" should be "You".
3: "Logout" should be "Log out".
4: This would look better as 2 lines.
5: "Though" should be "Thought".
6: "Tells me you know that you know" should be "Tells me that you know".
7: Calling it "Hudie's place" sounds a bit weird. I think it should be either just "Hudie" (Since that's the name of the net cafe), or "The net cafe".
8: This should work as 2 lines.
9: "I don't want make" should be "I don't want to make".
10: "Had to go it" should be "Had to go at it".
11: This option starting with "And" doesn't really make any sense, since it's not supposed to be a continuation of the 2nd option.
by comparison, the official translation wrote "Well, you sorted it all out.", which I think is more fitting.
12-13: ",,," should be "...".
14: "Logout" should be "Log out".
15: This would also look better as 2 lines.
16: "Have" should be "Had".
17: "I've never been but the reviews are great" should be "I've never been, but the reviews are great"
18: This one definitely needs to be changed to 2 lines.
19: "Fall" should be "Feel".
20: "You started out as weak-willed" should be "You started out as a weak-willed".
21: "I'm" should be "I'll".
22: This is pretty much ok as it is, but it'd look a bit better if "The most wings:" was moved to the 1st line (If possible).
23: In the comment left by Napolitan; "He" should be "She".
24: "I guess don't" should be "I guess I don't".
25: Same as before, based on my research, it should more or less always be "You can't fool me" instead of "You don't fool me".
26: "Save" should be "Saved".
 

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1: Missing punctuation.
2: "I can't too long" should be "I can't take too long".
3: "So i went pitched in" should be "So i went and pitched in".
4: "If" should be "It".
5: "Them" should be "It" (or "He" if Yuu is a bad actor, since that's the player in disguise).
6: "Should of" should be "Should have" or "Should've".
7-8: "He" should be "It". Also, in 8, "A independent" should be "An independent".
9: Missing punctuation.
10: "Take deal with them" should be either "Deal with them" or "Take care of them".
11: This one is directly following 10, so "She" should be "He".
12: The first sentence should have a period instead of a comma.
13: This is pretty minor, but Yuu's first sentence here feels weird. I think it'd be a bit better with a comma after "So", or ending it with a question mark instead of a period (or both).
15-16: I posted one of these for Function Call 1 already, but apparently i missed High Security 1 and Copy and Paste.
17: "Buy" should be "But".
18-19: "Login" & "Logout" should be "Log in" & "Log out".
20: "Found that" should be "Found out that".
22: "Reculse" should be "Recluse".
23: Looks like the ">" should be replaced with a dot.
24: "All is fair in love in war" should be "All is fair in love and war".
25-27: 25 and 26 are fine, but what Ryuuji says in 27 doesn't make any sense.
28: "Meet up Date" should be either "Meet up with Date" or "Meet Date".
29: "We're" should be "We'll".
30: "How do like" should be "How do you like".
31: "He" should be "It".
33-35: Nametags spelled "Sousuke" wrong.
36: "Kota" should be "Kouta".
37: "Kotaro" should be "Koutarou".
38: "You're sure here late" should be "You sure are here late".
39: I feel like there should be a comma after "Today". Probably not necessary though.
 

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  • Jayro @ Jayro:
    The phat model had amazingly loud speakers tho.
    +1
  • SylverReZ @ SylverReZ:
    @Jayro, I don't see whats so special about the DS ML, its just a DS lite in a phat shell. At least the phat model had louder speakers, whereas the lite has a much better screen.
    +1
  • SylverReZ @ SylverReZ:
    They probably said "Hey, why not we combine the two together and make a 'new' DS to sell".
  • Veho @ Veho:
    It's a DS Lite in a slightly bigger DS Lite shell.
    +1
  • Veho @ Veho:
    It's not a Nintendo / iQue official product, it's a 3rd party custom.
    +1
  • Veho @ Veho:
    Nothing special about it other than it's more comfortable than the Lite
    for people with beefy hands.
    +1
  • Jayro @ Jayro:
    I have yaoi anime hands, very lorge but slender.
  • Jayro @ Jayro:
    I'm Slenderman.
  • Veho @ Veho:
    I have hands.
  • BakerMan @ BakerMan:
    imagine not having hands, cringe
    +1
  • AncientBoi @ AncientBoi:
    ESPECIALLY for things I do to myself :sad:.. :tpi::rofl2: Or others :shy::blush::evil:
    +1
  • The Real Jdbye @ The Real Jdbye:
    @SylverReZ if you could find a v5 DS ML you would have the best of both worlds since the v5 units had the same backlight brightness levels as the DS Lite unlockable with flashme
  • The Real Jdbye @ The Real Jdbye:
    but that's a long shot
  • The Real Jdbye @ The Real Jdbye:
    i think only the red mario kart edition phat was v5
  • BigOnYa @ BigOnYa:
    A woman with no arms and no legs was sitting on a beach. A man comes along and the woman says, "I've never been hugged before." So the man feels bad and hugs her. She says "Well i've also never been kissed before." So he gives her a kiss on the cheek. She says "Well I've also never been fucked before." So the man picks her up, and throws her in the ocean and says "Now you're fucked."
    +1
  • BakerMan @ BakerMan:
    lmao
  • BakerMan @ BakerMan:
    anyways, we need to re-normalize physical media

    if i didn't want my games to be permanent, then i'd rent them
    +1
  • BigOnYa @ BigOnYa:
    Agreed, that why I try to buy all my games on disc, Xbox anyways. Switch games (which I pirate tbh) don't matter much, I stay offline 24/7 anyways.
  • AncientBoi @ AncientBoi:
    I don't pirate them, I Use Them :mellow:. Like I do @BigOnYa 's couch :tpi::evil::rofl2:
    +1
  • cearp @ cearp:
    @BakerMan - you can still "own" digital media, arguably easier and better than physical since you can make copies and backups, as much as you like.

    The issue is DRM
  • cearp @ cearp:
    You can buy drm free games / music / ebooks, and if you keep backups of your data (like documents and family photos etc), then you shouldn't lose the game. but with a disk, your toddler could put it in the toaster and there goes your $60

    :rofl2:
  • cearp @ cearp:
    still, I agree physical media is nice to have. just pointing out the issue is drm
  • rqkaiju2 @ rqkaiju2:
    i like physical media because it actually feels like you own it. thats why i plan on burning music to cds
    rqkaiju2 @ rqkaiju2: i like physical media because it actually feels like you own it. thats why i plan on burning...