Minor nitpicking at beginning of chapter 2. There's an edited line that reads as the following:
Eh!? W-w...
What are you saying Itsuki!?
The stutter should be "Wh-Wha—", or at least "Wh-Wh". That's the proper way to do it (you can check the other stutters in the game for reference). Second line needs a comma before Istuki. I also saw a few "Mhm"s—those are generally written out as "Mm-hmm".
(sorry for being nitpicky, I used to do localization work)
Edit: the more I play, the more issues I find lol (nothing major, just small grammar stuff). If you want, I could give you editing advice for the lines you've changed. Or you can tell me to buzz off. I'm just anal about it because it used to be my job.
Eh!? W-w...
What are you saying Itsuki!?
The stutter should be "Wh-Wha—", or at least "Wh-Wh". That's the proper way to do it (you can check the other stutters in the game for reference). Second line needs a comma before Istuki. I also saw a few "Mhm"s—those are generally written out as "Mm-hmm".
(sorry for being nitpicky, I used to do localization work)
Edit: the more I play, the more issues I find lol (nothing major, just small grammar stuff). If you want, I could give you editing advice for the lines you've changed. Or you can tell me to buzz off. I'm just anal about it because it used to be my job.
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