Help me write a poem

Pyrmon · Apr 14, 2011

I got this assignment to make an argumentative poem. I need to find a cause or subject and defend my thesis with arguments in the form of a poem. I got a few subjects, but I have a little difficulty starting the poem. The subjects are as follows:
Humanity is retarded(all that is wrong with humanity)
Suicide
Israelo-palestinian conflict
Anything, really. As long as there is a thesis.
It's free poetry, so no specific syllable count or rhymes.
Anyone could help me by giving me a few lines to get me started?

alkahest · Apr 14, 2011

use ur head and try thinking !!!!!

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suicidal feeling

suicide, suicide in my head,
suicide, suicide i'm nearly dead,
suicide, suicide my wrists are cut,
suicide, suicide i know i'm morally unwell.

suicide, suicide still in my head,
suicide, suicide the razors red,
suicide, suicide my hands dread,
suicide, suicide i know i'm morally unwell.

suicide, suicide prevailing in my head,
suicide, suicide the beginning of life,
suicide, suicide the end of sorrow,
suicide, suicide the end of pain.

suicide, suicide in my head,
suicide, suicide c'mon pull the trigger,
suicide, suicide im dead,
suicide, suicide i know i'm morally unwell.

Mukunda Jajoo

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Law · Apr 14, 2011

Suicide is sad
An end to innocent life
Unfortunate shame

Deleted member 473940 · Apr 14, 2011

QUOTE said:
Israelo-palestinian conflict

Well, I was never good at writing poems when I was given specific subjects. But if I was given those options, I would go for that.

SinHarvest24 · Apr 15, 2011

Suicide

Where i am,
no one's looking for me,
nowhere to go,
what should i do,
Suicide,
i'm coming for you.

Who i am,
no one cares,
i'm a little scared,
no one to hear my scream,
Suicide,
i'm coming for you.

Dead i am,
no more sorrow,
everyone bow their heads,
no more being alone,
Suicide,
I've found you.

hope this gives you an idea to work with.

mehh, i could have done better with more time

Pyrmon · Apr 15, 2011

Thanks for you replies. They are really helping me. But I have until next week, so keep the suggestions running!

Shinigami357 · Apr 15, 2011

Weird, I thought your avatar reminded me of someone else... Well, anyway, to the subject at hand. Everyone seems to like the suicide subject better, so... I'mma help you (hopefully) write about how homo sapiens are retards. It's free verse, right?

children weak and starving
the elderly sick and dying
people enraged and fighting
communities torn asunder

wars that prolong the suffering
calamities that tear our roots apart
disease and famine spreading
yet our leaders keep bickering

Well, I'm pretty much tapped out of verse right now (I haven't eaten yet) so if you like add on your own rantings (in a poetic manner). I left you with the "our leader keep bickering" line, so let it rip! Chill and good luck.

Ag_Corvus.corax
(this is my pseudonym, haha)

Keva · Apr 15, 2011

Its an easy way out
They claim
Get away from
The bills
The heartache
The pressure

That comes with the territory
of living a mortal life

But what about the people
you leave behind?
Where is their
escape?

Pyrmon · Apr 20, 2011

I think I got a nice one. Anyone can tell me what they think?

At sunrise on your first day, Human
Lights and shadows swarmed your life.
Day after day you built tomorrow
To make this earth a paradise.

There should have been no envy
for you to fulfill your destiny.
But it has engendered jealousy
at the raising of your first day

Today, with an uncertain future,
emerging jealousy gives alibi
to hatred, preparing the ground
for the war and all its ignominy
to lose your soul on the road.
At sunrise on your first day.

Search in your heart for the rest of the magic
Abandoned in the underworld.
The one of Love, so that it purifies
this heart that children have in their hands.
Then life will be harmony
to raise your first day.

Consider it's translated from french, so it's not perfect.

Pyrmon · Apr 21, 2011

I'd appreciate some feedback on that poem as I have to hand it in tomorrow.

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