Help me write a poem

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  1. Pyrmon
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    Pyrmon Burnin' Monkey Love

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    I got this assignment to make an argumentative poem. I need to find a cause or subject and defend my thesis with arguments in the form of a poem. I got a few subjects, but I have a little difficulty starting the poem. The subjects are as follows:
    Humanity is retarded(all that is wrong with humanity)
    Suicide
    Israelo-palestinian conflict
    Anything, really. As long as there is a thesis.
    It's free poetry, so no specific syllable count or rhymes.
    Anyone could help me by giving me a few lines to get me started?
     
  2. alkahest

    alkahest GBAtemp Regular

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    use ur head and try thinking !!!!!


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    suicidal feeling




    suicide, suicide in my head,
    suicide, suicide i'm nearly dead,
    suicide, suicide my wrists are cut,
    suicide, suicide i know i'm morally unwell.

    suicide, suicide still in my head,
    suicide, suicide the razors red,
    suicide, suicide my hands dread,
    suicide, suicide i know i'm morally unwell.


    suicide, suicide prevailing in my head,
    suicide, suicide the beginning of life,
    suicide, suicide the end of sorrow,
    suicide, suicide the end of pain.

    suicide, suicide in my head,
    suicide, suicide c'mon pull the trigger,
    suicide, suicide im dead,
    suicide, suicide i know i'm morally unwell.

    Mukunda Jajoo

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  3. Law

    Law rip ninjacat that zarcon made me

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    Suicide is sad
    An end to innocent life
    Unfortunate shame
     
  4. ShawnTRods

    ShawnTRods GBAtemp Psycho!

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    Well, I was never good at writing poems when I was given specific subjects. But if I was given those options, I would go for that.
     
  5. SinHarvest24

    SinHarvest24 Shiroyasha

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    Anywhere you think of me.
    Suicide

    Where i am,
    no one's looking for me,
    nowhere to go,
    what should i do,
    Suicide,
    i'm coming for you.

    Who i am,
    no one cares,
    i'm a little scared,
    no one to hear my scream,
    Suicide,
    i'm coming for you.

    Dead i am,
    no more sorrow,
    everyone bow their heads,
    no more being alone,
    Suicide,
    I've found you.




    hope this gives you an idea to work with.
    Warning: Spoilers inside!
     
  6. Pyrmon
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    Pyrmon Burnin' Monkey Love

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    Thanks for you replies. They are really helping me. But I have until next week, so keep the suggestions running!
     
  7. Shinigami357

    Shinigami357 Current "give a fuck" level: Honey Badger

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    Weird, I thought your avatar reminded me of someone else... Well, anyway, to the subject at hand. Everyone seems to like the suicide subject better, so... I'mma help you (hopefully) write about how homo sapiens are retards. It's free verse, right?

    children weak and starving
    the elderly sick and dying
    people enraged and fighting
    communities torn asunder

    wars that prolong the suffering
    calamities that tear our roots apart
    disease and famine spreading
    yet our leaders keep bickering


    Well, I'm pretty much tapped out of verse right now (I haven't eaten yet) so if you like add on your own rantings (in a poetic manner). I left you with the "our leader keep bickering" line, so let it rip! Chill and good luck.

    Ag_Corvus.corax
    (this is my pseudonym, haha)

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  8. Keva

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    Its an easy way out
    They claim
    Get away from
    The bills
    The heartache
    The pressure

    That comes with the territory
    of living a mortal life

    But what about the people
    you leave behind?
    Where is their
    escape?
     
  9. Pyrmon
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    Pyrmon Burnin' Monkey Love

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    I think I got a nice one. Anyone can tell me what they think?

    At sunrise on your first day, Human
    Lights and shadows swarmed your life.
    Day after day you built tomorrow
    To make this earth a paradise.

    There should have been no envy
    for you to fulfill your destiny.
    But it has engendered jealousy
    at the raising of your first day

    Today, with an uncertain future,
    emerging jealousy gives alibi
    to hatred, preparing the ground
    for the war and all its ignominy
    to lose your soul on the road.
    At sunrise on your first day.

    Search in your heart for the rest of the magic
    Abandoned in the underworld.
    The one of Love, so that it purifies
    this heart that children have in their hands.
    Then life will be harmony
    to raise your first day.

    Consider it's translated from french, so it's not perfect.
     
  10. Pyrmon
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    Pyrmon Burnin' Monkey Love

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    I'd appreciate some feedback on that poem as I have to hand it in tomorrow.