This is pretty straight forward. Also look at my previous reply - use the 20something line version.
I've done the same thing today. Tried it twice - the first time it didnt work, without the #!/bin/sh line then I added it, then it worked. I'm using the lolhack.sh, I'm using a linux line endings. Thats it. Nothing more to it.
The hack loads the lolhack.sh, which then tells the system to copy those files to the stick. Pretty straight forwards.
Maybe try a couple of times (waiting 5 minutes should be fine), always disconnecting and reconnecting the power cable first.
boot.log provided this error:
cp: target `/media/data/' is not a directory
Wondering if I create this file if it will help.