0000) Still Japanese
0001) Black screen after "Return to title"
0002) No need for red dot and space in "...to be deleted as well."
0006) No need for comma in "When 9 and 9 meet 9,"
0. Yes, the save screen still being in Japanese has been asked about (and explained) multiple times in this thread.
1. Do you mean the game crashed after choosing Return to Title? That's just a picture of the menu.
2. Yes, good call on the extra period. Just an editing error there.
3. The comma placement in that sentence is correct as-is.