Winter

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Apr 4, 2010

Winter by Snorlax at 8:38 AM (1,333 Views / 0 Likes) 7 replies

  1. Snorlax
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    HAI MR. WINTER! Hurry the hell up and get to Australia already! D:
     
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    This isn't the right place to post this...
     
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    It might be if you think of art in a broad sense. Some people consider art to be the creative expression of someone. This is a poem. I guess you can say it's "creative expression"!

    Good poem. Winter's awesome! Too bad, it's gone. Shitty summer awaits for me.
     
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    It's a type of art. :]
     
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    I am supportive that it is art session so, it is obvious that such post should be posted here. The poem is very simple and cute. It smells out as if it is composed within 4 to 5minutes. My perception states that it can be improved and can be more articulate. Also it needs editing for language and also for rhyming words.
     
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    I wrote this two years ago and just recently posted it.
    I too think that I could improve word usage and rhythm, but I'm not planning on publishing any poetry books (yet).
     
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    Again, thankyou. [​IMG]
     

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