Temper Poems

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Feb 25, 2009

Temper Poems by tinymonkeyt at 10:56 PM (4,947 Views / 0 Likes) 25 replies

  1. tinymonkeyt
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    my first attempt at something creative kinda failed so yeah...

    a collection of Temper Poems
    post here any poems you have written and ill add them in a lil collection.
    you can write about any Temper, or person, or place or thing (anything!)
     


  2. Densetsu

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    Nobody?

    I guess I'll give it a go then.

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    Translation:​
    after she swims upstream
    and lays her eggs
    the mother dies
    This is a haiku I wrote a few years ago when I lived in Japan. It's read in the traditional way from top to bottom, starting with the right column and ending with the left. In Japanese, the lines fit the 5-7-5 syllable format of a haiku. A traditional haiku usually makes a reference to a phenomenon in nature, usually something that is characteristic of a certain season. Mine would obviously be considered a spring haiku.

    The top kanji character in the leftmost column is the Japanese character for "salmon." It has two smaller characters to the right of it, which says "parent." When the haiku is read, the reader sees the character for "salmon," but will read it as "mother." The haiku evokes the idea of a mother exhausting all of her strength and making the ultimate sacrifice so that her children may be born.

    It can be interpreted in different ways. It can allude to survival, unconditional love, hard work and suffering among other Confucian and Buddhist ideas, but to me the main theme is sacrifice and the natural process that even as one life comes to an end, another life will begin anew. I originally thought to name the haiku, but I was really torn between calling it "Gisei" (sacrifice), or "En" (which means circle, but can also mean fate, bond, destiny).

    In the end I decided to leave it open-ended for the reader to interpret it however they wish.

    I lived in a little town just outside of a larger city. That city had an annual haiku competition every spring, and anyone could enter. All kids in the city from elementary and junior high school were required to submit an entry as part of an assignment in their poetry unit. I submitted this for the hell of it, expecting that my entry would be eliminated in the first round. But I made it to the finalist round (top 10), and I was the only non-Japanese finalist. Didn't actually place though, but it was all good. Making top 10 out of thousands of entries in a Japanese contest isn't too shabby for an American [​IMG]

    The red characters in the square are a stylized version of the characters in my avatar, "Densetsu Sanzen" (sanzen means "three thousand"). In my original entry I used an actual hanko (name stamp) that has my real name on it.

    This reminds me, I also studied Japanese calligraphy during the years I lived in Japan. I think when I have more time, I'll start my own GBAtemp blog and post up some of my works.
     
  3. Szyslak

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    Very, very interesting Densetsu. Thanks for sharing that and taking the time to explain it. As a father of two (sometimes extremely trying) children, I know exactly how I'll choose to interpret your work. [​IMG]
     
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    I LOVE your haiku & explanation of it Densetsu3000, really cool. Thanks.

    Heres one of my favorite poems...

    Gene, Gene made a machine,
    Joe Joe made it go.

    Art, Art blew a fart,
    and blew the damn thing apart.



    Anyone???

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    Hilarious it is, and I've never heard it! [​IMG]

    One of mine is also funny. It was from Spongebob:

    There once was a man from Peru
    Who dreamed he had eaten his shoe
    He woke with a fright
    in the middle of the night
    And found that his dream had come true

    [​IMG] Maybe I'll take a crack at some seriously poetry of my own someday.
     
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    I've got penis
    So do you
    let's have some fun,
    mind you.
     
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    A short little rhyme Ive had as my personal statement for a couple of weeks now.


    I used to troll for myself.
    Now I p0wn to defend.
    I swore to all my friends.
    I would never flame again.


    [​IMG]
     
  8. Toni Plutonij

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    Maaaaaannnn.....Zed!!!!!! Police Academy (I think it was a C.O.P. Citizens on Patrol episode), I love that guy!!

    p1ngy, very nice one!!! You proved it many times already [​IMG]
     
  9. Densetsu

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    Here's one I made for my brother at his request.

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    Translation:​
    I thrust deeply
    my huge dong
    her neck bulges


    The red stamp in this one is the hand-carved stone inkan that was given to me as a gift by my calligraphy teacher. It says my real name. Oh, if only she knew what I was using my skills for.

    Everyone who comes into my brother's room and sees this hanging on his wall says "That's beautiful!"

    To which my brother always replies, "Yes. Yes it is."
     
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    So I had another sleepless night as usual, I was thinking about this thread on and off through the night. And somewhere somehow this little poem bubbled to the surface of my thoughts. I never really do this sort of thing, I dont think Ive ever written a proper poem, so dont be too cruel. Even though it turned out maybe more dramatic then I intended. [​IMG]



    Lucid Philosopher


    So I just went through another night, I just lost another fight
    I laid in my bed at midnight, with no sleep, now I see daylight
    How many times will I have to fight the same old fight?
    I dream of the day when I dream, and dont see twilight

    Sometimes I wonder, is this a curse or my strength
    When I dont sleep all I do is philosophise at length
    I lay there wondering about the world, while Im counting my breaths
    Will I lay here wondering forever, until theres nothing to wonder about left?

    Is there more to life, or are we just human machines?
    When we shut down, do our souls carry on like living dreams?
    Are we part of a plan? What the hell does life mean?
    Did we make the world this cruel? Or is this the way its always been?

    If God made me in his image, is he as weak as me?
    If Im the image of God, do I have Gods strength inside of me?
    Why did God decide to make every man, animal and tree?
    If everything around me was created, was it created for me?

    Me me me, but I dont lie here thinking of myself
    I think for you, to help you find the power in yourself
    Helping others is worth more then any material wealth
    Materially I dont want a single thing for any of my help

    Like I said, these sort of thoughts are what gives me strength
    I will continue thinking like this, until I have no strength left
    I think about my life, but I dont think about it with regret
    Because if my thoughts have helped others, I dont want to sleep yet.
     
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    There was a lady from Ealing,
    Who had a funny feeling,
    She laid on her back,
    And opened her crack,
    And pissed all over the ceiling!

    My favourite
     
  12. tinymonkeyt
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    ooh p1ngy nice one.
    and lol @jax -.-

    densetsu, its so cool that you write your poems in japanese!
     
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    I did this for my best friend's wedding last year. I was the best man and these were the same words I used near the end of my speech during the reception. I presented the work to the bride and groom and told everyone in the room that "I made this for them because they have the powah!" [​IMG]
     
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    Oh, I suck at poetry, but here's a go!

    The scent of your neck lingers,
    As I hear your car door close,
    The feeling of your lips, your fingers,
    Your silk-like voice that flows.

    On the spot. My 8th grade English teacher said I write poetry well, but.. Well, I don't know. I rather prefer to write short stories, though poetry is very challenging to my lexicon as I have to find new words to rhyme, therefore building up my vocabulary! So, opinions?

    And that's AMAZING, Densetsu3000!!
     
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    Win thread must not die! [​IMG]

    I wrote this just now, while eating breakfast. No title.....


    Just a normal day, four birds in the sky.
    One bird fell to earth, nobody knew why.
    Three birds on their perch, one low two high.
    Four birds died today, nobody knows why.
    How did these four birds make so many people cry?
    Today is not a normal day, dust has blacked out the sky.
    We can never get revenge, but they force us to try.
    Was it four birds that caused this, or was that just another lie?​
     
  16. Szyslak

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    Very nice pingy.

    If I could write in such splendid verse,
    my attempts at communication
    would not have to be so harsh and terse.
     
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    Roses are red
    Violets are blue
    Don't ask for ROMS
    I don't care if your new

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    Also: Haiku

    I got a flash card
    And I need a ROM web site
    SHUT THE FUCK UP NooB


    sry, I couldn't resist. [​IMG]
     
  18. dinofan01

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    I've got a couple of poems on my hard drive. I'll bust one out for this thread:
    Life is unpredictable.
    You come home and she can be different from when you left.
    She can be cruel and unusual.
    She can make you feel like less of man.
    It’s as if life is constantly yelling for no good reason.
    She acts if it’s her time of the month except it lasts all your life.
    In other words, life’s a bitch!

    Thats just a little one I thought up in class. Its really more a metaphor. And it doesn't rhyme...
     
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    This topic should be moved to Graphics and Art!

    anyway i used to write a lot:

    Static times in static lives,
    static skies fall on static nights.
    As static lies flow from static minds,
    a static figure sits in disguise
    The static blurs all its thoughts,
    and through static learns all its faults.
    So hides the figure in selfish time,
    not making noise nor worldly binds.
    It dies a little every day
    that it prefers to stay it*s grey.
    It*s grey not caring or wanting to
    it*s grey is digging its own tomb.

    But to every dark there is a light
    there is a day for every night
    Through the static flickers a light
    Dim, subtle, still full of life
    Will the figure close its eyes
    Or smash the light with wicked tries
    Or will it choose to trust the light
    To lead it from its static night
    Or even more will it stay
    Comfortably lying in it*s waste
    Again not caring or wanting to
    Again not bearing its burdened truth

    Slowly…
     
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    my booty shakes
    the leaves i rake
    when my tummy aches
    i go to jamba juice to get a shake
    then i go to denny's for a steak
    then i swim in a lake
    chicken i bake
    for my mothers sake [​IMG]
     

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