post ur own poetry

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Jul 27, 2010

post ur own poetry by digipokemaster at 7:41 PM (1,659 Views / 0 Likes) 21 replies

  1. digipokemaster
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    Member digipokemaster Innocent Uke

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    here are mines
    Future of Life​
    I find joy thats hides in the darkest of nights, I seek enlightenment in the darkness where some have abandon all hope. People walk in the light and some in the dark, there are some that walk inbetween the light and the dark. I walk in the darkest of path where Death lives, I am the one they fear the fallen angels are gathering more lost souls for the coming war that will decide the true everlasting king and reign ruler of all. Abandon all hope that you may have, the time have come to choice the path you will walk on .


    My Path​
    I find enlightenment in the darkness, the chains that named fate binds a pact within me. we seek a memories of things that is a mystery to all mortal, Im like a costume which hides my true form and some see my true form and some just see what they want to see. My true form wants to be free to unlease my hidden power but is afraid of what people may think, will they abandon me: will they hate me and the most scary question im afraid to ask is will they kill me. If they find out my darkest secrets and beliefs. im free to choose my path, everyone must find their own path weither it the right one or not it up to them. People have no right to push their beliefs on others, i believe what i want to believe in. the choice is mine alone to make.


    The Corrupt World​
    I see the world for what it is, a world filled with Greed, Lust, Hate, Lonelyness, War, Chaos and Death. All we do is nothing, we are blinded by this world. I for one choose the path in the middle neither good nor evil. The world pushes it beliefs on you, I live not on faith or beliefs nor do I live on facts:that this world is corrupted. Although I live in this world, it just a road that im traveling on nothing more the that.


    yes i know that they are dark, i love dark poetry. i write free hand, i can do haiku though that a little tougher the these cus these flow through me better.
     


  2. Ossot

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    Is there a reason you write it in prose?
     
  3. digipokemaster
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    huh???????
     
  4. Crimsonclaw111

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    Prose: the ordinary form of spoken or written language, without metrical structure, as distinguished from poetry or verse.
     
  5. Ritsuki

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    I made some, but in french. Let me try to translate it :


    I met one day,
    Under a heavy sun,
    A beautiful princess,
    With golden hair.

    With her sapphire eyes,
    And her ruby lips,
    In an instant she enchanted me,
    And made my spirit hers.

    Oh sweet mermaid,
    Your mellifluous song
    Made my soul capsizing
    And the gods jealous.

    It's with these words,
    That I bless this day,
    When the angels came down,
    To give us your love.


    J'ai rencontré un jour,
    Sous un soleil de plomb,
    Une jolie princesse
    Aux cheveux blonds.

    Avec ses yeux de saphir,
    Et ses lèvres des rubis,
    En un instant elle m'ensorcela,
    Et captura mon esprit.

    Ô douce sirène
    Ton chant si mélodieux
    A fait chavirer mon âme
    Et rendu jaloux les dieux.

    C'est donc par ces mots,
    Que je bénis ce jour,
    Ou les anges descendirent,
    Nous faire don de ton amour.
     
  6. Potticus

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    Roses are red
    Violets are blue
    I love to masturbate
    and I bet everyone else does too.
     
  7. Szyslak

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    Nice poem Ritsuki. Out of curiosity, does it rhyme in French? It looks like it might, but I know very little French.
     
  8. Canonbeat234

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    I suck at poetry, so here's my post.
     
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    I thought that was sooo cool. [​IMG]
     
  10. Ritsuki

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    Thanks [​IMG] Yes, it rhymes, but in a very unusual scheme : ABCB
     
  11. VashTS

    Member VashTS Beat it, son

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    I wrote a nice little french diddy a while back:

    Quand il n'ya rien et tout est d'accord,
    c'est vous, la meilleure la personne que j'adore.
    Les yeux, les cheveux, la voix et la tete.
    Je vous veux mais c'est vous que je deteste.
    Je me blesse et je pleure c'est tourjours pour vous.
    C'est la meilleure que j'ai voulu.
    Je peut acheter la coeur d'une fille.
    main le coeur ne sera pas le meme-chose de la vie.
    La vie ne coute pas cher pour moi.
    J'espere que nous perlions une autre fois.
    et tour sera bien et tout ira d'accord.
    C'est vous la meilleure, la personne que j'adore.

    rough translation (if my memory serves me)
    when there is nothing and everything is ok
    its you, the greatest, the person i adore
    the eyes, the hair the voice and the head
    i want you but its you that i hate
    i hurt myself and i cry, if always for you
    is the greatest that i have wanted.
    i could win the heart of a girl
    but the heart will not be the same as the life
    life doesn't cost much for me
    i hope we could speak one more time
    and everything will be good and everything will be ok
    its you the greatest the person i adore.

    correct me if i am wrong. french grammar might be off as well.

    I was never fluent but i took french for 5 years in high school. If I kept going I would have been fluent. I wrote a lot of love poems back in my teenage years, but now I find it to be cheesy, though at the time I thought it was brilliant.
     
  12. VashTS

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    I also wrote this one, it was for a project for school it was supposed to be about America and describe why America is great...hehe

    TV mind, hints with rhymes
    your face is cracked and filled with lies
    Your life your reality you try to enhance,
    to an unknown god you will pray and dance.
    Say no to evil in your gods face
    But yes to yourself in your own place.
    One side beautiful covered in gold
    but turn around and world behold.
    The out of shape and drug filled life
    abuse your children abuse your wife.
    a hidden world but everyone knows
    how the sea of the underground flows.
    deep beneath everyone's eyes
    a nation of hate, hypocrites, lies
    We think we have changed but thats not true
    we've always been told just what to do.
    subtle messages portayed on tv
    thats tells the kids just what they need.
    but change the channel and people are dead
    one man murdered shot in his head
    but that's ok, its not me
    that is the way we were brought up to be.
    that shows that nothing has changed
    just certain beliefs are rearranged.
    hidden deep beneath layers of skin
    america is a game no one can win.
     
  13. digipokemaster
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    i write poetry on and off, the i have wrote on here that how i have them in my notebook. so ill have to edit them someday. im sorry if they arent prose ill edit them. Could you all give me feedback on mine and other people poems to so they can get better at poetry write?
     
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    I wrote this poem last year. It was only poem I ever posted (aside from my Beowulf poem)
    Warning: Spoilers inside!
     
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    i like it i think it good luv to see ur boewolf poem and i agree with ur poem it sad that the world are against "different stuff" why cant we all agree and let thing go
     
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    mthrnite is cool.
    He rules over the whole 'Temp.
    You must respect him.

    -A haiku I made up in 20 seconds.
     
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    Thanks [​IMG] I really honestly didn't know I wrote it until like days later though
     
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    that goods even if u were "tripping balls"
     
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    Hum the Beatles song Yesterday while reading this.

    Warning, I wrote this when I was an obnoxious teen and the Vietnam war wasn't old history.

    Yesterday
    Was a beautiful napalm day
    I fried all the gooks away
    And now I yearn for more napalm days

    Why
    Did they need to burn
    I don't know, the general wouldn't say
    Rape burn and pillage, how I want to sack a VC village

    I wrote the whole song out originally, but lets see you remember a dumb song 30 years from now too [​IMG]
     
  20. ProtoKun7

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    http://gbatemp.net/t209560-i-haiku-do-you?

    Needs moar haikus.
     

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