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    OP MrShawnTRods GBAtemp Psycho!
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    Shall we start? Just write 1 short poetric stanza [​IMG]. not copied from anywhere of course lol.


    Yet another day goes by,
    Without you girl by my side,
    What is that makes me think about thy?
    Is it your laughter or is it your smile?
     
  2. Fel

    Fel GBAtemp's Adventurer
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    In this faraway light
    I envelop the myriad array of orbs,
    Even though they cloud my sight
    And I must let them go.
    It's midnight.
     
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    This is my original POENYTRE [​IMG]
     
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    OP MrShawnTRods GBAtemp Psycho!
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    The light fades away,
    As the darkness approaches,
    Hopes turn into fear,
    With the sight of you my dear.
     
  5. Paarish

    Paarish Connor's Nublet
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    Haiku

    As I fall into abyss
    Life inside my body fades
    Faces past me by.

    Made it on the spot. Bit depressing [​IMG]
     
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    I lay here,
    about to die,
    why aren't you,
    by my side.....
     
  7. Fel

    Fel GBAtemp's Adventurer
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    Ooh la la, they're all kind of sad or depressing (except the wonderful POENYTRY). Let's make a happy one:

    Fresh boughs of green
    Reverberate the chirping laughter -
    I lie in the flowery plain
    Beneath a tall shouldered tree.


    Or do you think that tall shouldered sounds strange and makes you pause instead of ending the poem evocatively as well?
     
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    OP MrShawnTRods GBAtemp Psycho!
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    When you were in tears,
    I was there to cheer.
    Have you ever wondered why?
    Or dont you find a reason to care?
     
  9. Fel

    Fel GBAtemp's Adventurer
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    Has your girlfriend broken up with you? You sound like it. Or you have a very interesting choice of topic for your poems.

    Two ponies gallop on a tree
    One asking the other - Where's my leaf?

    ...yeah, this one was inspired by the poenytry and it's more of a joke. [​IMG]
     
  10. MrShawnTRods

    OP MrShawnTRods GBAtemp Psycho!
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    @Fel
    lol maybe? There was a whole diary of poems that I wrote. Notes, letters, memorable stuff.. I threw everything away [​IMG].

    What time is it?
    Not the right time.
    You make me wonder,
    If it will ever be fine.
     
  11. Fel

    Fel GBAtemp's Adventurer
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    Why? It's awesome to look back at what you had written. Especially in several years' time, it shows how much you've grown, changed or just become a little bit different. It can serve as a useful source of insight.

    Stop worrying and face the truth
    Another day will come
    And you'll be free
    Free for an eternity.
     
  12. MrShawnTRods

    OP MrShawnTRods GBAtemp Psycho!
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    @Fel
    Well, I know I have no chance of getting her back. i wanted to remove every trace.
    I still have the 10,000+ e-mails from her saved in my inbox. Too much to delete lol.


    So much pain,
    that I coudnt bare,
    I had to take steps,
    To not look at the rear.
     
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    Paarish Connor's Nublet
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    That one sounds naughty [​IMG]
     
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    as i see you walk by
    i can't help but remember
    our own special moments
    spent in that room of mine

    do i suck? i think i do
     
  15. MrShawnTRods

    OP MrShawnTRods GBAtemp Psycho!
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    @30084pm
    not what you think o.o!

    What Did I lose?
    I forgot a long ago.
    I lost sight of you.
    Whats more,
    I was unable to return.
     
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    It sounds as though you are trying to treat woman with respect rather than as objects by not looking at their butts
     
  17. Fel

    Fel GBAtemp's Adventurer
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    Yeah, breaking up isn't always easy. For either of the two. Maybe it's better than just try to forget about everything in denial to just accept it and try to move on that way?

    Close your heart with your palm
    It shall bleed not more
    If you look into the night
    And see the countless (other) twinkling stars.

    I have to bid you goodnight, I feel drowsy.
     
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    OP MrShawnTRods GBAtemp Psycho!
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    There is a space,
    Between you and me.
    I tried to erase,
    The memories of my dreams.
     
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    Fel GBAtemp's Adventurer
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    Yeah, I was expecting it to end with "To not look back", "To not look at the rear" completely changed it into something sexual. [​IMG].

    When I look back in time
    When the frosts where still cold
    I enjoyed the mountain scenery
    And did not cry.

    ---Version one---
    When I look back in time
    I feel the leaves brush against my skin
    Glad memories resurface
    And I dream.

    You'll get over it eventually. [​IMG]

    @naranyan: Actually, it sounds pretty good!
     
  20. MrShawnTRods

    OP MrShawnTRods GBAtemp Psycho!
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    Wanted it to rhyme [​IMG].


    I hear voices in my head,
    Sit here and ask myself,
    Why is it that its you I hear?
    Love doesnt need questions
    Not for me,
    My dear!
     
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