• ...oh, sorry. Looks like this is actually GBATemp.
    Nonetheless, I'm going to criticize the "Welcome to your blog" message you get when you first start using GBATemp's (useless) blog feature. Ready? (That was a rhetorical question. I am going to start criticizing whether you are ready or not.)

    I'll start by saying I don't care about the first paragraph. Other than it going against the fact that very few people are going to regard anything the message is suggesting I write, I don't see anything else to criticize.
    The second "paragraph" is not so good. First, they ended a line with a colon, but on the next line, they capitalized the "W" in "Write". That's indicative of improper grammar. They also used, in my opinion, a few too many exclamation marks.
    Next: "Because it your space". I don't like this bit at all. It should be "Because it is your space." The sentence was missing proper punctuation and was utilizing incorrect grammar (lack of "is").
    Finally, the last sentence lacked a period.
    "...ready?" is not a sentence at all. Completely lacking in expression. Zero out of ten. See me after class.

    That's all I have to say about that.

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