Chapter 17 (Lord chapter 3):
missing "the" before darkness.
Humm... I don't understand that sentence lol
possible -> possibly (that could possibly destroy...)
Chapter 15 (Lord final chapter)
Is the last place called Angel "Halo" in the main story too?
If you need to change that name to match the main story, it's appearing few times so check all instances.
it was going to be the bad ending, so I reloaded the save
well -> dwell ? (I didn't know that word, but I don't think "to well" is a verb. most probably "dwell" instead)
Complement -> Compliment (apparently, it's a common typo, maybe check all occurrences too)
missing "you" -> "If you plan"
I think the "Prier portrait" is not placed correctly.
it should be:
Old guy talking -> prier asking if she looks pretty in demon outfit -> old guy telling "as long as you don't do anything bad"
Can you select which portrait to display on a text window? I think I found few other place in the main story where it looks odd with the story/portrait order. but I didn't report it.
Anyway, here is the 3 screenshot, if you can, put a portrait in the second one, and none if the third one:
I don't know the word "getup". was meant to be setup? or something else? outfit, or appearance will be fine too.